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Death comes not for me,
my love.
They come to cut out
the evil of my life.
She comes to carve out
all the bad self-image
thoughts,
all the negativity
I have for myself.
He comes to cut out
the memories
of all the men
who made me
a possession,
all the anger
for how I let it happen.
They come as one,
to exorcise the blackness
and leave me whole
to live again.
my love.
They come to cut out
the evil of my life.
She comes to carve out
all the bad self-image
thoughts,
all the negativity
I have for myself.
He comes to cut out
the memories
of all the men
who made me
a possession,
all the anger
for how I let it happen.
They come as one,
to exorcise the blackness
and leave me whole
to live again.
Number 21 in my second series and prompted by the October Miscellaneous prompt on 
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Thank you for the response!
I really enjoyed the ambigiousity of this piece, and how accurately the title reflects this with the idea of a secret. The idea of death as rebirth and the juxtaposition between death seen as a negative thing and what in fact it can be interpreted as is very effective, and I loved how ‘death’ was your first word and ‘live again’ your last ones! That just added a certain something to your writing.
The way you change from ‘them’ to ‘he’ and ‘she’ and then have them as one is also brilliant, and in my opinion reflects the concept of death very well.
I loved the layout as well... so much can be expressed not only through words, but through how they’re placed and this is a perfect example of that.
I really can’t find anything to improve on, so keep up the excellent writing!
I really enjoyed the ambigiousity of this piece, and how accurately the title reflects this with the idea of a secret. The idea of death as rebirth and the juxtaposition between death seen as a negative thing and what in fact it can be interpreted as is very effective, and I loved how ‘death’ was your first word and ‘live again’ your last ones! That just added a certain something to your writing.
The way you change from ‘them’ to ‘he’ and ‘she’ and then have them as one is also brilliant, and in my opinion reflects the concept of death very well.
I loved the layout as well... so much can be expressed not only through words, but through how they’re placed and this is a perfect example of that.
I really can’t find anything to improve on, so keep up the excellent writing!